Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Wednesday 30th December 2009 5:18pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

I notice Dumbledore didn't address any of Harry's complaints or accusations against Snape.

You pointed out something I've felt, that as a spy, Snape makes no sense.

Thanks for the story.

noylj posted a comment on Saturday 7th November 2009 4:01pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

So, despite everything, the bastard has done nothing about Snape
Please update

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Friday 7th November 2008 12:57pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Good chapter.

gunny

noylj posted a comment on Monday 25th February 2008 6:10pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Well, re-reading since it has been awhile. Thanks for updating. Don't forget the other stories. I hope that Centi can be helped, since one thing I think Harry deserves is at least a pleasant-looking partner. Of course, for the hell he goes through, I always wish that he could have several concubines to keep him happy and entertained.
You have beautifully summarized my whole position on Dumbles and Snape and do not agree with canon that these two men deserve any kind thoughts. Death to tyrants and manipulative puppetmasters.

brad posted a comment on Thursday 27th December 2007 8:20am for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Sometimes your stories, various chapters, skirt the borderline of "too much Harry", if you know what I mean. A Harry who is *too* powerful, too clever, too bombastic, too confident, telling everyone from Dumbledore down exactly how to do things and what's wrong with them all. Which is good fun in a fanfic,
but only in small doses. I thought we got too much full-on Harry in this chapter. Too much "but you can't do that! / Yes I did!". "no warrior can
fight on indefinitely" / but Harry did. A portkey "loses all other magical enhancements" - but not in Harry's case. "There's no such thing as a fireball
spell that size" - but there is. Trussing up a head of house and then the headmaster. Lecturing the entire staff, ordering them around. And so forth. For me it was just too much, too quickly. I liked the earlier chapters - you do super!Harry action very well (at least until he becomes *too* over-the-top powerful) - but the chapters where Harry lectures everyone else, like this one, full of didactic dialogue, drags.

I was pleased/thankful to read that Harry and Millicent had finally reached Hogwarts - safe at last!

Cute way to get Harry and 'Centi' together, and to organise their dates, by having Harry (nobly) offer to run his own Paladin training in synchronisation with her. (I've lost track of why he's so powerful here, in this AU story, if he hasn't yet finished the course of treatment?)

cwejr posted a comment on Wednesday 26th December 2007 2:41am for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

I hope there isn't a long wait for another chapter. This story is great and I want more.

o.T posted a comment on Wednesday 12th December 2007 4:47am for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

When Snape started spewing his diatribe and Harry worked up and released his Righteous Indignation(tm) at him and then at Albus, I had a flash of him saying "This is Sparta!" and kicking Snape into a hole or something. Just mad. You're one of the few authors I can read who writes without smut; I mean it's hard, but I can handle it.

Can't wait for the next update!

Detrimus posted a comment on Thursday 6th December 2007 3:59am for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Whoa. But also, cool. I never really get to see Millicent/Harry pairings and they're usually evil or just poorly written. This was neither.

Can't wait for the next update.

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 2:26pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

"Failure was not an attractive option."

My compliments, that's an absolutely classic line.

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Saturday 1st December 2007 8:40am for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Nicely done. Now I'll have to see about reading all the other stories in this series.

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 29th November 2007 7:03pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Heh, and they thought he was a bit "different" before. I do like this more assertive Harry, though some things haven't changed and he still stands staunchly by his friends.

I don't think his professors quite realized the true level of his power or understanding and it seems to be quite disconcerting them. Add in his willingness to dabble with things that "public opinion" and "common wisdom" consider "evil" and the combination has got to really throw them for a loop.

I quite like the way he's willing to trade on fame, name, and fortune to help others but not for himself. I reckon Dumbles has just realized that he's created a most powerful wizard who is not going to be blindly subservient to him; he won't like that too much at all but doesn't have a choice.

It will be interesting to see the reaction Severus has to these last requests.

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 8:29pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Yay!! I honestly think I like this variation the best out of the three... though I think that everyone is being too easy on Snape... he assaulted Harry... and I look forward to him screwing up so that Harry can make good on his threat!

I think that Millicent will make an excellent match with Harry and look forward to that relationship progressing.

I love it and look forward to reading more.

jimnjoye posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:31pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Great chapter! My only complaint is how quickly Harry is trusting Dumbledore and Minerva again. After all the valid points he made, I think there should have been a bit more time before he was so forgiving of them. I'm starting to like this story even more than your other two Paladin stories.

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 3:18am for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Nice fight scene to begin this. The family nickname is good too. The portkey to finish it was superb, especially the way Harry did the incantation. Not totally convinced by the way that McGonagall reacted to Harry's attack on Snape and Dumbledore but the Centi parts were great. Also I don't think even Snape would suggest that Centi's face should be left the way it is, but otherwise good chapter. The fight was particularly enjoyable. More please.

Minor Brit-picks: I think you meant West Country rather than western counties, Professor not ma'am when addressing McGonagall and trousers not slacks

A posted a comment on Tuesday 27th November 2007 7:51pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Please don't have Harry delay the potion - if the Potions are different for just Harry and Millicent then it would be far easier and far harder for Snape to deny the possibility of poisoning them.

Also, too much was done with Snape - and not enough with Dawlish and possibly the Minister being after Harry.

berni posted a comment on Tuesday 27th November 2007 7:24pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

awesome chapter! i have never read any stories with Millicent in it, let alone with her in the pairing. can't wait for more

Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Tuesday 27th November 2007 4:08pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Wow, I'd wondered if you were abandoning this story! I'm glad you haven't done so. Great chapter!!!

Kinsfire posted a comment on Tuesday 27th November 2007 1:26pm for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

This is a version of Dumbledore that is blatantly evil, in my opinion. I think that he still doesn't see that he is merely doing all these things because he needs Harry. He is very much of a mind, it seems, that if he had to kill everyone else in the Paladin program to make sure that Harry would succeed, he would moan about the necessity and then get someone else to do the dirty deed.

The Snape in this (I can't speak for the others) is definitely coming across as Voldemort's. He's going to have to do a LOT of talking to convince me (and Harry and Centi) that he's NOT a full DE.

Excellent job, by the way.

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Tuesday 27th November 2007 11:47am for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Good chapter.

I have to wonder where you're going with Snape, however. It seems completely unreasonable to me that DD & McG would be more upset with Harry than Snape when Snape attacked first and with a more dangerous curse.

And if Harry believes the case he's made for Snape be LV's spy, not DD's, then why would he trust potions from Snape?

So I suspect, since the Paladin program depends on Snape's potion making, that you're casting him rather like JKR--throughly horrible, but still 'Light'? Oh well. :-)

Thanks for sharing this with us.

Tumshie posted a comment on Tuesday 27th November 2007 10:38am for Chapter Three - Crashing Right Through

Excellent once again, just one point in the UK the word 'fanny' is slang for female genitalia, the type of bag you are referring to is known as a bum bag.