Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Wednesday 30th December 2009 4:04pm for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

You're certainly piling up the problems for Harry and Centi. Meanie.

Thanks for the story. It's caught interest, and I hope that you update it in the not too distant future.

Tom A.

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Friday 7th November 2008 7:37am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Good chapter.

gunny

cwejr posted a comment on Wednesday 26th December 2007 1:34am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

This story is addictive. Thank you.

olfrik posted a comment on Friday 16th November 2007 5:38am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Beautifully done. Please continue.

Jimbocous posted a comment on Monday 12th November 2007 2:37pm for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Thanks for pointing me this way. Nicely done so far; I'll be looking forward to more on this one as well.

egret posted a comment on Saturday 29th September 2007 6:32am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

I've been very interested in this story - I just re-read it. I hope you continue it - I like redeeming Millicent. I hate JKR's tendency to make all villains ugly, especially because she's so conventional in her tastes. Anyway, I like the stories that treat Millicent as human, especially when they keep her back-story close to canon.

berni posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 6:40pm for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

this is an awesome story!! so interesting! can't wait for more!!

Anaknisatanas posted a comment on Wednesday 27th June 2007 2:39pm for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Oh great update. I loved your descriptions of Harry and Millicent traveling to Hogwarts. How much resistance will they encounter now? And how will missing the potions affect Harry? I am looking forward to the next update. I love how different this is from the other Paladin AUs

in-fanficauthors posted a comment on Saturday 16th June 2007 5:17am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Interesting. I wonder though why Harry thinks that the DEs know that he is going to Hogwarts. Simply because he has not turned up anywhere else?

Does Harry not know Hermione's phone number? Could he have gotten to London faster than Hogwarts? Mongered a communication spell?

Please continue.

Patches posted a comment on Thursday 14th June 2007 7:21pm for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

This is excellent. I think it is great for Harry to make friends with someone that he once thought was an enemy. I am so glad he is taking good care of "Centi". What an education he is receiving. Thank goodness for Hermione. She is a wonder that is for sure. Harry is really unusual too for asking her for help. It sure has been a rough trip for Harry and Centi. I hope they manage to get to Hogwarts before the Deatheaters catch them. Are they going to circle Hogwarts and come in from the other side? I look forward to more of this story. Thanks for writing. I have read some of your wife's story and it is really good. I appreciate both of you very much. pms

Highbrass posted a comment on Thursday 14th June 2007 5:44am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Well things are certainly heating up. I'm going to hazard a guess that the last 50 miles will be some of the most difficult. Can't wait for the next bit.

jimnjoye posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 5:00pm for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Great chapter. With all the magic Harry is doing, why isn't he getting any owls from the Ministry? It's interesting to get the Slytherin point of view for Harry's adventures.

Aaran St Vines replied:

My theory is that underage magical detectors are pointed at family dwellings of younger witches and wizards and places they congregate within view of Muggles - their schools, shops near their homes, etc.Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 2:17pm for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

This is getting quite interesting, indeed, as former enemies work together of necessity to survive and find they actually like each other once the superficialities are bypassed. I suspect Tom and Deeters are going to regret the day they attacked the Bulstrodes; for that matter, I suspect Fudge and company won't end up likling it much, either.

Some very nice development and action in this chapter. I'm looking forward to more.

brad posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 1:02pm for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Riveting action sequences - you do that so well! - an exciting and engrossing read. I felt the tension mount in me as I longed for Harry and 'Centi' to reach safety and get all magically healed. But you've left us with him to run a final gauntlet of bad guys, arrrgh!!

I'm glad you covered so meticulously all of Harry's other travel options. Did he know about the ability of a patronus to carry messages back then? Anyway, it's as well you covered all the bases, so nitpickers couldn't bail you up about them. I liked how apparation in your universe is so difficult - to side-along someone else - and that's consistent with his exodus from Arabella's, needing Dobby's help, et cetera.

I have NO IDEA why you had to add in Centi's menstruation cycle. It was done well, but what value did it add in the first place? She's banged up enough, and you've used all her various injuries to fine avail in building the tension and putting the pressure on Harry; adding 'cramps' and bloody tampons didn't achieve any additional benefit, to my mind. A bit of unpleasantness added for no real reason?

(I thought their eye contact and swapping stories and names was much more effective in building intimacy (nicely done, and believable - it didn't cross over into saccharine territory) - than Harry's having to strip off her panties and help her with her period, if that's the reason)

Damn, so Dawlish still survives in this universe too. I can't believe he's still alive and an auror in your original paladin world too.

I hadn't realised that PANSY had also joined the programme, I must have missed that in the other story. I'm still curious as to whether Draco will fit in at all, as I've commented before.

Good chapter, but I'm hoping very much we'll see these two reach safety in the next one!!

Aaran St Vines replied:

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Brad. I went with the feminine issues to give the two a very intimate barrier they had to cross to create a closeness regarding physical matters needed in the future. It had to be platonic and not just sharing battle together. To be exact on one issue - Harry helped Millicent with her pants, not her panties - yes, that's an Americanism now that I think about it. Women's breeches are cut tight usually and have to be coaxed over their hips. That's what I'm thinking about.

hedwig_edwiges posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 9:29am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

How come the DEs and the Ministry can find Harry and Millicent but not the Order? By now, Dumbledore should have be able to find and help them, shouldn't he?

dave gerecke posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 8:50am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

I like it.
Please keep going
dave

warpwizard posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 6:56am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Great chapter. Lots of detail, but it wasn't a slog. Nice job. I'm feeling Harry's exhaustion and Centi's pain. Hopefully they can catch a break by the end of next chapter.

Krenn posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 3:41am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Just wondering - who is the third Slytherin adult that Harry is friends with? Ollivander and Moody are mentioned in ch. 5 of the other Paladin stories, but just those two.

Aaran St Vines replied:

Thanks for reading and reviewing more of my stories. It is my plan to have Tonks be a Slytherin. I think she showed up at Hogwarts already misused for her abilities like she is in many stories - not sexually misused, just treated like a play toy instead of a friend. She was already set to show the world by the time she was eleven, as I see it. The need to prove one's self is a Sorting Hat favorite reason to make a snake. I have a lot of respect for what Slytherin should be. Even more respect for Hufflepuffs. Cheers!

Crys posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 3:36am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

Two-wand casting? Hmm. You're doing it differently than I am, but that's fine. Nice change to make two simultaneous but at reduced power.

> I later found out that he was Disillusioned, but I could somehow see him anyway.
Okay, it's just mean to be droping info on us like THAT!

Overall, nice chapter. Spotted various spelling/grammar problems, but nothing huge.

Aaran St Vines replied:

Two wand casting takes place in my other Paladin stories, but differently, and at a different time. Casting weakly only occurred at first in this tale. In actual battle, by the end he was casting with both as strongly as with one, he just didn't realize it. Remember, he just willed his eyes to do what he wanted in order to eye-speak. Who knonws what else he'll be able to do because of that wreckless bit of Mongering. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

Decumo9 posted a comment on Wednesday 13th June 2007 2:54am for Chapter Two - North By Northwest

not a bad chapter. I like the unusual pairing. I am waiting to see how the rest of the 'light' side takes to centi.