John8 posted a comment on Sunday 30th July 2006 1:46pm

An excellent story, but near the end of chapter 5 there is a loophole that I noticed. It says that Vernon's appointment is at 8 in the morning, but the scene therafter is at 8 at night.

Donald Deutsch posted a comment on Friday 14th July 2006 3:42pm

Even tho I find it funny that you decided to blow up Redmond, please not with to big a bomb, for I live in the state. LOL. Good story, and can't wait to read more.

goofy posted a comment on Monday 10th July 2006 2:04am

great story so far, a very interesting concept of spell mongering, Please update soon
cheers

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Thursday 6th July 2006 6:18am

Good chapter. It is time fr Harry and Hermione to hook up.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Thursday 6th July 2006 1:05am

Good chapter.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Wednesday 5th July 2006 12:40pm

Very good chapter. I do hope this isn't one of those stories where Harry and Hermione get together in the last chapter. Hate those.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Wednesday 5th July 2006 7:41am

Outstanding chapter. I like the use of Vietnam in this. I was there in 1971 and know for a fact that war isn't glory or fun. Nice writing.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Wednesday 5th July 2006 5:50am

Good chapter.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Wednesday 5th July 2006 2:59am

Very good, love it when the baddies get their tails handed to them. Liking this story more and more.

gunny

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Wednesday 5th July 2006 12:25am

Good start.

gunny

Grukal posted a comment on Saturday 1st July 2006 10:43pm

I am very impressed by your work on these paladin series, and i look forward to read them until they are complete.

jessie179 posted a comment on Saturday 1st July 2006 7:16am

I liked it.

Chris Carter posted a comment on Friday 26th May 2006 4:54pm

*Ted

Chris Carter posted a comment on Friday 26th May 2006 4:40pm

So, far this story seems to be very carefully plotted, and I enjoy many of the little scenes/details that you include (especially Arthur trying to take a phone call). One of the most interesting things in fics for me, is how fringe characters are filled in and main characters fleshed out. I think you've created a very original set of Grangers and I find your more militaristic treatment of the fight against Voldemort to also be pretty unique. I'm glad that you don't simply have H and Hr declaring their undying love two paragraphs in, but are allowing things to develope in a more realistic fashion. As far as (hopefully) constructive criticism goes: the story really bogs down and becomes boring at times to read with the constant overly drawn out flashbacks. Also, while I like your characterization, I'm hoping that this starts being a Harry Potter fic sometime soon, instead of a Tom Granger fic.

Alexis posted a comment on Wednesday 24th May 2006 2:27pm

Fantastic chapter - you are great at getting your audience sucked into your world and taken along on your ride. I love the spiritual discussion between Harry and Remus and I think that Minerva finally hit on a way to teach ron there at the end. Awesome.

Alexis posted a comment on Wednesday 24th May 2006 1:49pm

Another wonderful chapter! I'm really enjoying this so far. I laughed hysterically at Vernon and the phone calls. Great plot point! I love Harry's new room and having Dobby answer to him worked wonderfully. Great job!

Alexis posted a comment on Wednesday 24th May 2006 1:19pm

Wonderful chapter! I did notice one mistake - the paragraph beginning with 'Finally the elder wizard spoke.' is actually in there twice. I think that the Paladin Program is awesome and I think it's really neat that you are writing this h/hr and h/g. I'm an h/hr girl at heart, but I think it's a great idea. *laugh* Thanks for this one!

Alexis posted a comment on Wednesday 24th May 2006 12:49pm

Wow, the letters were great and Mr. Granger's story about Vietnam was wonderful. Great job!

Alexis posted a comment on Wednesday 24th May 2006 12:37pm

*laugh* Boys can be clueless, hopefully you will clear his muddled brain sooner rather than later. Great chapter!

Alexis posted a comment on Wednesday 24th May 2006 11:56am

Wow! Great chapter! I'm really enjoying this story and glad that you have already posted several more chapters. *grin* I love that the muggles kicked ass! :)