sunrisesunset posted a comment on Tuesday 17th July 2007 3:20pm

Curious... very curious, Mr. St.Vines... ^^
I thoroughly enjoyed the thoroughness of your vision - a completely plausible and well thought-out explanation for the mysterious events of Harry's life. In a few short days we'll know the "official" version, but somehow I doubt it will be as original - though that is a funny thing to say of canon.

This is quite different from your other works, yet shares many of the same qualities: a meticulous attention to detail, a confident tone of storytelling, and the occasional moments of dry wit.

I have only a few criticisms: For one, you repeat yourself a few times during the expository sections. Also, I felt that the lengthy introduction may discourage some readers who need a bit of action right off the bat to get hooked. And of course...

...who was Harry's bride?! xD

I look forward to more fantastic tales from you in the future.

anonymous5 posted a comment on Tuesday 17th July 2007 1:05pm

This is as fine a continuation of your exquisitely thought-out writing as I could have hoped. Thank you so much for giving us a glimpse of how it might have been!! I do have a couple of minor apostrophes-don't-pluralize quibbles:

"...when he waltzed through the Death Eater's chasing after Snape and Malfoy"

"...waltz into Hogwarts with his Death Eater's Polyjuiced"